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The writer potrays Zoe as feeling memorable and unforgettable about a particular moment. This moment is described as "pure as ice". This simile highlights how vividly she remembers her feelings in that moment and that she remembers them in detail. This is reinforced by how she is "trapped" and the moment "could never be taken away". The adjective "trapped" suggests how she cannot help thinking about this moment, highlighting the importance of this moemnt to her. The adverb "never" emphasises this, implying that this memory and her feelings in this moment will be trapped in her forever. Through this, the writer could be revealing how much Aoe values this moment, making us wonder why this moment is so unforgettable to her.

Furthermore, the writer potrays Zoe as feeling calm and tranquil through the use of a semantic field of nature, with "mountain", "snow", "hill", and "ice". This highlights her admiration of the nature and how she enjoys being in nature and feels calm as the nature surrounds her. This is reinforced by how everywhere is "snow and silence. Snow and silence". The sibilance creates a calm tone, suggesting Zoe feels peaceful. Alternatively, this repetition could also suggest she is alone, perhaps in a way that she feels carefree and can do whatever she wants to do.

Moreover, the writer potrays Zoe's feeling as excited and free. Her skis "looked like weird talons" of "red and gold". This implies she feels free as if she is an eagle, flying in the infinite sky freely. This simile could also highlight her excitement to be like an eagle. This is reinforced by the colourful imagery of "red and gold". This vibrancy of colours perhaps reflect her overwhelming emotion of excitement. The adjective "gold" could emphasise how much he values this moment.